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Re-do of my untitled Science Fantasy. This is the title for now and I have changed the MC name from August Wysteria to Ever Rose. I believe that sounds more princess-like haha.
EDIT 1/10/2013. Changed the title and some words.
EDIT 1/10/2013. Changed the title and some words.
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You use a lot, and I mean A LOT, of white space lines xD I understand you want to re-align the focus but to the end it kinda gets irritating. You have an excellent feeling to add details, some writers just dont detail their stories, others detail it to the endless. But you always add just enough detail to make it intruiging but less enough so i doesn't get boring to read. All your names are awesome as well (although I think Ever Rose is a wee bti cliché) and it is clear you made this world up which makes it even more awesome. I am looking forward to chapter 2 ^^